Nicholas Reynolds
October 1, 2014
Class:C
Alex Rose: FIFA Addiction
- Use more contractions
- More descriptive vocabulary words
- Divide into paragraphs (not just one big one)
Sean Eykel: The Most Harmless Thing
- Strong vocabulary
- Very good job of painting a picture in the readers mind
- Humorous in some aspects
Brittany Holmes: The Impossible Task
- Good use of imagery
- Need a stronger opening sentence that grabs the readers attention
- Could use more, stronger vocabulary
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